REMINDER: Projects due Friday, no excuses. I am available for help/questions at lunchtime or after school by appointment.
Today, we discussed revising our own poetry.
The five things that should be eliminated are:
-cliches (it's not you it's me, you are my world)
-abstract terms (love, hate, sad, wisdom) Replace these with more specific, sensory images.
-things that are unclear or that the reader cannot understand
-boring verbs (walk, say, like, etc.) Replace these with specific verbs (stroll, scream, enjoy)
-inverted sentences (the book was written by Jane, happy) is the way I feel about you) Replace these with strong, direct sentences (Jane wrote the book, I feel happy about you)
Also, try to condense and compress your poem.
Then, we revised, in groups, our classmates' poetry.
Homework:
Bring in a revised version of your poem to read to the class.
Make sure you also have your original poem; I am looking to see how seriously you took the revision process, and how deeply you thought about your work.
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